Then I should get back to my Camp NaNo project. Those robots aren't going to build themselves. Or are they?
Pitch Slam Entry
Pitch: (35 words) (Original can be found here)
Two things a gay man can become: Soldier or priest.
William Brown
enlists intending to return in a body bag. If he dies, no one will know his
shame. He doesn’t plan to find love.
Excerpt: (First 250 words)
I never understood the
point of sympathy cards. I never liked sending them and hated receiving them. I
know it’s because everyone wants you to know they’re thinking of you, but
really all they are are constant physical reminders of what you’ve lost.
The first sympathy cards I ever received were after my
mom passed away. I was ten. She had been driving too fast and wrapped her car
around a telephone pole. My aunts and uncles all clucked their tongues over the
horrible accident and ‘tut tutted’ over the waste of such a young and vibrant
life.
“You have to be a big, brave boy for your father,” Aunt
Babe told me. “Your mother was very loved and will be missed. See all the cards
people sent? It shows they care.” She indicated the cards ornamenting the ledge
over the fireplace and the piles of cards, still unopened, on the hallway
table. Aunt Babe was my mom’s younger sister. The memorial service was the last
time I ever saw her. It was the last time I saw any of my aunts or uncles. My
dad became a semi-hermit, locking everyone else out, but keeping me locked in.
I waited until the company left, with their final teary
kisses and good-byes. As soon as the door locked behind them forever, I
gathered up all the sympathy cards and threw them in the trash. We didn’t need
the reminders of how our family of three now numbered only two.
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ReplyDeleteYour last paragraph could be a powerful opener.
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